I've just seen the updated the version :) It looks better, but some brush work still looks a bit random.
What of the green brush at the top of the wallpaper? This stands out the most because it's a colour that isn't
even repeated throughout the wallpaper. The only splotch of green is at the top -- it's random and takes away from
the quality of the overall wallpaper. I think you should just completely remove it - I love the looks it has, but
it's just too out of place on this wall.
The brushes on the left side of this wallpaper contains the most random brushwork. Just above/touching the left
Ichigo's hair are these blotchy looking things that look like poor quality abstract brushes. . . All I can really
say is that the brushes you used and the way you used them just don't flow nicely. I can see the styles of the
brushes you used. If you're going to use different kinds of brush sets, you have to connect them in some way (ex.
same colours, group them together, etc).
Those blobs of light are pretty off too. You could always replace them or just take them off.