Excellent doujin auel29! Teehee, I drew that image of Tasuki too... I think it's the duty of any FY fan to do something with that image! X-P Top marks on the coloring job! Really Really lovely work on getting the colors right and the shading! *has shading envy*
Now the other comments... Hotohori's nose seems a little off-- a little crooked. Tamahome's face seems too scrunched up... I think his nose and mouth should be a tad lower. Finally, Tasuki's face seems a little too fat (or his nose is too far to the right)
However! Mitsukake is perfect! He's not my favorite FY character, but he is perfection in your doujin! I'm not that great at hands myself, so I always look at how other's draw hands, and you did a great job on Tasuki's left hand! Finally, Chichiri looks awesome! I love seeing him without his mask on! (Okay, I think my comment is long enough now... ^_^') Keep up the great work! :D