Oh will i be the first poster after i finish typing this?
Anyway, this looks gorgeous, it's so rare to see original doujinshi walled that it's definitely worth a fav
^_^.
coloring and characters are all good, i'd say that you've improved in your character drawing, but without
losing your own style, so it's great :). nice clothes the guys are wearing, i particularly like kazuma's coat
(flames on the lower part oh yeah rock and roll baby *cough* ^_^')
now to small problems : the hands might need some work, and the characters do not really fit the bg (i mean they're
over outlined, so it really looks like you pasted them on it), maybe due to a big difference between the tones of
colours you used.
and kiro's position is a bit weird as well, his feet seems to be on nothing (or maybe it's on the xmas text :)
)..
otherwise great job obaa san, and merry christmas to you too *hugs and kiss on both cheeks* XP