This looks good. I see the messups you made on this. But it still looks good.

kool doujinshi i really like it whatz his name on the pole getting bit by a dog is really funny well good job

hehe its not bad at all,
other than i cant make out benitora's face ^^:
the facial expressions are nice n the grass looks good
n that birdy up front looks cool too n_n
nice work on the clothing too.
the clouds kinda suck :P
n the characters need shadows!
hehe nice work though

its not bad! its a great drawing! you did such a great job on the shading! the bird looks cool tooXD I think the girl to the right might need more shadows>.< but other than that the drawing is really great!

Hmmmm... sylvacoer likes! (*~.^*) Don't be so hard on yourself for drawing from the manga - I have to do that too, especially when drawing Kyo (his hair, argh, his hair! *growls* I notice you did an excellent job on his hair, by the by...)
I like what you did to benitora - hee, it's so much fun to abuse him, since he asks for it.
I think my favorite person in the pic is Mahiro - you drew her whole body, and she has the softer look that you sometimes glimpse at in the manga.
What really wows me is your attention to detail - you kind of sold yourself short on the buildings (not that I don't understand, we're aren't all architects, and perspective can be a real bitch!), but on everything else, like the tartan on the girls' skirts, and the folds of the clothing are well executed and natural - it seems almost as if you just happened to draw them that way!
sorry if I bored you with my overlong rant, but in my opinion, this is an excellent doujin that sets the standard for your future work. (*~.^*)

very impressive.
i am totally speechless.

i love how you managed to put all characters together.
plus the light shading makes them look pretty good.

keep it up! very beautiful!

HAI! very nice! I love SDK heh he ^^- tis awesome and so is this! HAI! HAI! HAI! this is ofcourse +Favie

I am gonna be totally honest w/ you, coz we're friends and I know you would do the same w/ me ^.~

Its awesome! Oooh the idea for it was funny! The shading you did was great, and it's obvious you put alotta effort in it! I mean, just look at the clothes! They're nearly perfect! Ooooh n I love the hair for them 'specially Kyo's hair n Benitora looks so funny! Great job, really n truthfully!

There are a few things though, I think the proportions on the girls faces coulda been a lil better maybe. I dunno, I'm just 'trying' to look for some critism here! I mean, they're still awesome, but maybe thats just how they are s'posed to look in the manga? I have never seen the manga, so I wouldn't know

But anyways, looks like your on your way to mastering this style as well! Kudos to you, and theis piece is a shewin for sure!!!

mmm not bad...so much detail...very very very nice!!! the girl's hairs are so pretty!!! great work!!!

Yay, finally you've graced us with you're most recent art. *grabs his specs for some deep analysis*

i know you worked real hard on it so I'll work hard on the analysis too . I'll start on things that can be improved my least fave topic but gotta do it, cause it's useful.

1. Perspectives: See you've been experimenting with new techniques and trying to draw objects that are in the distance. I've never seen Benitora or Haku but can notice that some of the proportions are a little off, but part of that is due to the difficulty in drawing so small, don’t know what the actual size pic is but sure on original both these guys were real small and difficult to draw the details in.
2. Shadows: Not really a problem, but an area to try out too. I noticed the girl with the really cool hair is the only shadow in the picture, so this could be a new technique to experiment with and breathe even more life into it

Yay time for strengthes
1. Clarity: I've noticed some of it with your older drawings, and this one shows how much your ability has improved. All of your characters are really clear, sharp, and well defined. May not know these characters can feel each ones “aura� and presence
2. Shading: I think this is one of your greatest strengths. I love anime for all its vibrant colors, and it's because of that I appreciate your shading even more, because with your shading you can add in essence color and flare to what normally should just be black and white.
3. Motion: Not sure if planned or not, but the bird in the center has the feel of it swooping down. A really powerful motion, regardless I think you did a great job capturing it.
4. Perspectives: Heh, same topic but with a good twist. Seems someone remembers their perspectives lessons. I took some architect classes back in the day and remember how there was emphasis on how to make walls, buildings objects appear to shrink as it fades in the distance. Very evident in the left wall and the patio that holds the grass.

Oh boy, I've been here a while, but lots of fun. Quick fire round . Never seen grass in black and white drawing, but I like what you did in this pic with it, I'm sure it took you quite some time to do it. The clouds are a nice touch too. All in all I really love your new work, and excited to see what your other new projects and creations are.

oooooh! great job my dear!! u have put so much effort into it!! and all that detail it took me a while to actually take everything in...and the shading is very very well done!! u have become so good! i cant wait for ur next submission!

lol woww.....group work....not dbz....& arkkk......grass o_O" that's great details & all looks great! keep it up

&...sorry for didn't read ur description ^^;;

Quote: you guys must think : "finally" (well, at least for those who read the whole thing through)

yeah ............ "finally"............ no more DBZ !!! XP yeepee

eheh the grass ain't too bad, just it seems a bit unkept. and looks like the birds of prey are out to eat benitora, after the dog's done with him ^_^. i like the big fluffy clouds, they look like cotton candy (drools...... been ages since i last ate any of that * turns back to a youngster* )
hum one thing, if it's a high school, why's there a road sign on the bg? ahah whatever, we don't care, the faces are indeed a bit simple, but the shading is good, and clothes are great. it seems like you draw guys faces better though ^_^.
and finally, the bird that takes flight seems kinda out of place, he's too 'realistic' if you see what i mean

good job anyway, keep on the new drawings (and good luck on this contest)

Long description, and so many smileys, but I made it through..."finally".

Well, I'm really not sure what to say anymore, lol. I liked how you drew many characters and its evident you put a lot of effort into each character, they're very detailed in their facial features and the clothing. However, I still think the girl's face on the far right looks strange. Also, the guy's face on the flagpole, Benitora, doesn't look right, but you already know that.

Although the character are meant to be the focus of the drawing, you could've done more with the background. The birds and clouds are nicely done, but the walls, you seemed to have cheaped out, lol.

Overall, nice work and best of luck in the contest! *does cheerleading routine*

Quote by Ayamaeloh, and last, but not least, i must thank my dear friend Iyasis for all the help and the numerous tips she gave me on this one (even the original idea for the underpant thingy ^^)... you were an angel Iyasis, i owe you, thanks ^^

~Yay! I'm an angel ^^ *plays ring toss with halo*

cool!!!SDK characters rock!!its such a nice drawng concept too i wish youve included the ninja guy with the gun,though.

very nice... better effect and i love it
thx for the picture...

Love it, somehow it looks good with out color anyway did you get the idea from one of the volumes of Samurai Deeper Kyo because there was something like it in one of the volumes.

It's a creative artwork and good job on it too! I like the underpants idea, it's definitely fun. ^^;; Keep up the good work!