WOW I really like the wings
And her face looks sooo sad >__< *lol*

Really nice Doujinshi!
^__^

~luna~

the wings are nice and also the facial expression she got on her face...^^ nice drawing... i kind'a remembered Wrath from Hagane no Renkinjutsushi though, i dun'no why.. but i did... hehe.. keep it up!

na-chan [chizuku]

gel-chan? are you kidding me-?! the wings are the best part.. see above comments! it's your first try to shade fully- so you will definitely improve.. the more you use the technique the more you'll learn its tremendous capabilities to transcend the drawing/make it look dynamic.. ..with shading for example in this drawing... let's say the darker spots should be between the wings and her back... we add an overlapping of shading there... thin lines first (compressed, then slowly goes apart).... then when you can visualize it will be a good effect, add more heavy lines.. in short, the parts that are the darkest has the most batches of overlapping lines.. the ones nearest the light source has the least..

i full-viewed- and the limbs are proportioned- length, etc.. more work on the hands/fingers perhaps.. the poem it was derived from sounds pretty interesting- pabasa!

This is really sweet. She's really cute and your proportions are fine. First, her head was done well and her expression really shows some wistfulness. Her hair is really styled nicely. Her clothes were drawn well too but you can improve more by adding more wrinkles and pleats to show that her clothes are too big for her. Your shading has improved but you need to go a big stronger to show your lights and darks. That's what my art teacher kept telling us. I think you did a really nice job on the wings. For the dark parts, don't be afraid to press down on your pencil. I'm kind of confused about the shading lines on the left side. This is really great work. You're really improving. ^_^